Show them you are vulnerable and touch thier hearts!

Just did my Speech #10, "Inspire the Audience" and this is what my evaluator commented:

Good Comments
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"It's good that you can laugh at yourself. Even you came in last most of the time in your class, you failed your Mathamatics Exams, etc. You still can find humor and laugh over it!
You just told the others that you're vulnerable. You show the weaker side of you, as a human. Do you know that audience like to see a weaker side of a speaker? Because this make the character (you) more real. This made you more human.
Some speaker doesn't like to show the weaker side. The speaker doesn't talk about his flaw, his weaknesses, his failuers, etc. It's just too perfect, to be a speaker; a human...."

Points of Improvement
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"Somehow your speech doesn't touch me. You did told us your weakness, and how you overcome it. You got the message, but you did not connect your message with the audience. The audience does not feel the urgency to change. You did not sink the message into the heart of the audience.
What I suggest to you is to 'touch' and 'scold' the audience heart by asking something that's common to us like: 'How many times you plan stop smoking and you always says wait for tommorow, and when tomorrow comes, you never stop and you want to wait for another tomorrow?' (Try to 'scold' the audience a bit) 'Do you know that you have also KILL your love ones because you have made them to become 2nd hand smoker as well!?'
After that, make sure you don't let your audience hanging like that, says something that lift them up again like: 'One less smoker in the World doesn't mean the cigratte company going for brankcrupt.' Er... Maybe that's a bad example, but just get the audience attention first by saying some funny stuff. 'One less smoker meaning one more happy family.'

And always supplement a few good quotes: 'People tell you you cannot do something it's because they cannot do it themselves' - Persuit of Happyness, Will Smith.

Have fun! :)"


To connect with the audience
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1. Touch
2. Scold
3. Uplift
4. Good quotes.